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Problem-Solution Essay School Play Test

Outline for Problem-Solution Essay

1. Here's the problem. Our dog keeps pooping but we ran out of bags. 2. We have to pick up the poop with our hands 3. We should go to the store and get some bags. We can tell our mom to walk the dog and pick up the poop. 4. I helped my mom pick up the poop and throw the poop away. 5. We will realize that teamworks help because my mom and I work together to clean up the poop 6. If we don't work together we get nothing done but if we work together we get a lot done.

Rough Draft of "Problem-Solution Essay"

First Paragraph "Introduction"

On Saturday, March 31 my dog named foxy pooped on the floor. We ran out of bags and we had to pick up the poop with our hands. It smelled bad. What should I do? The problem is we do not have a backup solution to picking up our dog's poop.

The poop from the ground.It smells really bad and the poop is just all the place. I asked my mom if we should get a popper scooper.

We should go to the store and get more bags and get more scoopers so we can pick up the poop. I'll compromise with you I will clean up the poop if you do my social studies homework. To whom are you talking? We should take our dog out for walks instead of just let him just keep making a mess in our kitchen. I asked my mom if she could take my dog foxy out forth first time. Then my mom said sure to taking my dog out for a walk. Foxy gets me really mad when he makes a mess on the ground and doesn't bark or do anything

This solution will help us get foxy poop outside instead of our house.

Good start, but you need to make your ideas clearer and organize them in paragraphs wtih topic sentences. Keep working on this, Cameron. 4/22/12 Final Grade Ideas 2 Your problem is not clear. Is it not having something to use to clean up after Foxy or how to avoid have Foxy mess up in the house? Organization 3 You started out well in the first paragraph, but then you lost the organization and did not even attempt a conclusion. Word choice 4 You could probably use better word choices in your second paragraph. Voice 3 Because you wrote without much discussion or your ideas, you did not have an opportunity to provide much voice. Fluency 5 - Lots of variation in your sentences' lengths. Conventions 4 Some missing commas and a few capitalization errors

Total points = 21 = C