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Sixth Grade language arts page Problem-Solution Essay School Play Test

keep some books in the desks to much$$$$$$$$$$$$ disorgaition lossing papers books fall out
 * problem=lockers are to small
 * how it can be solved=not have so many books
 * why can't we=not enof space
 * effects=late 4 class

Ouch! Ouch! I am so sick of these lockers. This is a real problem. The problem is that the lockers at school are too small.I can't find anything in this rat's nest. (Good image! ) There has to be an easy way to solve this messy problem. Someday i hope that my locker will be as neat as the cross at church. My locker is so messy i can not find anything. (Is your messy locker the problem or the result of the problem of a small locker?

We have too many books: a two-inch reading book,a two-inch English book,an inch and a half math book ,and a five-inch geography book. This all adds up to ten and a half inches and that is not counting notebooks and binder and all the space we have in a five by ten inch locker.

The way we can solve this situation is that we can buy new big lockers. In our school we don't have a lot of room down stairs because all the middle school students are down stairs.Even if we bought new lockers, there would still be no room. To help solve the space problem we could get rid of the coat hooks and put lockers on that wall. Coats could then be hung in the big locker with our books.

Another solution to the locker problem would be for teachers to allow us to keep the books we need for their class in the desk instead of in the lockers. A small fix to this problem is to make each student a wooden locker shelf for use the space saver.Although this would take a lot of time, these could be some good solutions. Perhaps this could be done while the students are on spring break. Add more details to these solutions.

i am so sick of the lockers at our school. This is not helping me on my six grade journey. By the end of the year, I will have spent about ten hours cleaning my locker only to have it look like a train wreck once again. I am hoping that the locker problems will get fixed soon.

You have a really good start, but you need to have someone help you fix the technical problems. Could you do that in the Learning Center? Otherwise, come to get help from me at recess today. Ideas 4 The way you began your essay, it appeared the problem you would discuss would be keeping your locker neat. Be very clear in identifying your problem. Organization 4 Identify the problem at the end of the introduction and beginning of conclusion. It seems to be missing in both places. Word Choice 5 good job! Voice 5 good job! Nice job of using effective imagery! Fluency 5; Conventions 4 Great improvement, but still there are a few problems with spelling and capitalization. Total points = 27 = A-