Mwie

Sixth Grade language arts page School Play Test

Mwie

Problem Solution Essay

Are you organized? Because i'm not. My locker is a total mess and I can't find anything when I need it and with our two minute bells in between classes it's even worse because i'm just grabbing my books for the next class and i through the other books from the previous class somewere in my locker.

But on every Thursday we have resource time before lunch in our usual science class we get the chance to do literally anything we want like homework or cleaning your locker which I always take the chance to do every Thursday. But it never stays that way.

The reason why we take the time to clean our locker is because we try to stay organised so our life easier wile we are in school so we can get our books or other things and put them back in order

Like I said we get the chance to clean our locker or do whatever we want at that time and we all want a clean locker right? Well I know I do and i think everybody else does including me.

That is why we should have clean lockers because without clean lockers we are a total mess. We need to find the right things at the right times. And when we don't find the right things at the right times we get very upset or frustrated.

That is why we should have clean lockers!

Ideas 3 Your problem is not clearly stated and the same can be said of your solutions. Could there be more than one solution? Organization 3 You need to clearly state your problem at the end of the introduction and at the beginning of the conclusion Word Choice 4 Could you use some other words for clean? Voice 3 You could use dialogue and more specific description of what your locker looks like Fluency 3 Mose of your sentences are about the same length. Conventions 3 Missing good sentence structure in places and punctuation in many sentences. Total 20 = C