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Sixth Grade language arts page

Problem-Solution Essay

School Play Test 1**. Introduction and thesis**

2. **Details about the problem**

3. **Propose solution**

4. **Details about the propose solution**

5. **Conclusion**

//What do you get when you have horrible cafeteria food? A big problem!!!// //At my school I see lots of __People__ getting t__here__ lunches and then throwing// //them in the garbage. And then they eat nothing. We have a problem with our cafeteria food.//

//The hot dogs are green, and they can bounce!! The __chickedys__// //with the potatoes are just a big pile of mush. None of this food is very good at// //all. (Why do you think this happens? Is it because the food service cannot afford better food because they// //charge just a little for the food?)//

//I thank a good solution is that we get a diffrent lunch serves to make our// //food. We could have a bar and __you__ could get all typs of food, not tha just one type// //__so we at least hove a choice.__ You basically said this in the earlier part of the sentence.//

//Good start, Graham. Now keeping developing the details of your solutions and write a conclusion.// //ideas- 4 Your idea is very clear, but you don't have a conclusion in which to repeat it.// //Organization - 2 You had your idea organized from the beginning to the middle, but forgot the end.// //Word Choice 5// //Voice 4 Your descriptions were very specific. Now, how about, giving the verbs some zing, too.// //Fluency 5 Good job of varying sentence lengths and beginnings// //Conventions 3 Some spelling and one capitalization problem//

//total points = 23 = B-//