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Sixth grade reading Sixth Grade language arts page Problem-Solution Essay Tom Sawyer Questions Charles Langenfeld Rough Draft Essay 3/27/12

**__ An organizational dilemma __**


 * Ever since I can remember, I have had an annoying problem with getting organized at the end of the school day. No matter how hard I try, I always end up packing up my backpack after the bell to go home rings. “Why can't I do it?” is what I often find me saying to myself. I do not know how some people manage to consistently stay organized day after day. I have a serious problem with getting organized at the end of the day. **


 * One main reason why it is hard for me to stay organized is because I am too busy talking to my friends instead of packing up. To prevent this issue from occurring, I can pack up all of my books, papers, folders, and binders first. Then, after all of my tasks for getting organized at the end of the day are complete, I can talk to my friends. **


 * Most of the time my locker looks like a town that was just hit by a hurricane. After I organize it, the hurricane strikes again. Maybe, if I organize my locker more often, it will stay clean. This way I won’t have to clean it as much. If I manage to do this, I will be able to open up my locker without a cascade of books falling down on me. I have found out that organizing a locker can help me a great deal at the end of the day. **


 * I misplace papers all the time. My geography papers end up in my math folder while my math papers end up in my science folder. I can fix this issue by labeling all my folders so I won’t mix them up. Papers of all sorts and sizes are just floating around in my locker. After I receive a paper, I can neatly place it in my folder. Designating a take home folder will also help me improve my organizational skills. A take home folder can help me bring home all the papers that I need, and not forget the important worksheet that is due the next day. **


 * At the end of the day, as I am looking in my assignment notebook, I say to myself, “Shucks! Why didn’t I fill out the assignments that were given to me?” This is a common problem for me that happens all the time. Not filling out an assignment notebook can cause me to forget assignments. A solution to this is that after a teacher assigns an assignment, I can write it down in my assignment notebook right away. **


 * Getting and staying organized at the end of the day can cause a rigorous effort. I know many classmates who have his or her own strategy for getting organized. It is a life skill. I know some people that will not learn the importance of organization for years. My goal is to get organized at the end of the day! **

Y ou used some of your vocabulary words well, but a couple weren't being used correctly. I also enjoyed the voice you have in your essay. Try to elaborate on how your suggestions will actually improve your organization. Be sure to revise the fifth paragraph to be in first person as the rest of your essay is.

Ideas 4 First Paragraph has wordy sentence and fourth paragraph needs a topic sentence; Organization 5; Word Choice 5; Voice 5; Fluency 4 Little variety in sentence lengths; Conventions 5 Total = 28 = A